
This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about a Big Black Horse. It can be a horse, a metaphor or an interpretation of KT Tunstall’s “Big Black Horse and a Cherry Tree.” Go where the prompt leads!
This is my response. It is based on a picture book manuscript I am working on at the moment, hoping to submit to a publisher soon. Fingers crossed. That story is based upon another 214-word story I wrote earlier in the year, which you can read here. All three are the same but different. I hope you like it.
The Big Black Horse
The riders considered the available horses. Fergal chose the big black, Valentina the silver. They mounted their steeds and entered the arena. Fergal cantered to one end and Valentina the other. They steadied their mounts and faced each other.
“Let the contest begin! Charge!”
The contestants galloped towards each other.
Nearing the centre of the arena, Fergal’s black steed balked, tossing him off. Valentina wheeled her horse around, dismounted and raced to Fergal’s side.
“You okay, Fergal?”
“It’s only a scratch.”
“I’ll get a plaster from Miss.”
“It’s okay. Let’s go again. Can I have silver this time?”
“Okay.”

Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.
I remember this little piece. I loved these characters and their interaction here just as much the first time!
How wonderful that you have a book in the works too!! So close now. Exciting times!
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Thanks for your support, Rebecca. There’s not really a book in the works. Just a manuscript in waiting. 🤣
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Even better, the words are done! Just needs a team to help publish it. I’ll be reading a real live copy with the kiddos before too long 😁
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I love your optimism, Rebecca. Fingers crossed.
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Loved the ending Norah. Hi Ho Silver! 🙂
P.S. I’m glad you popped over to my blog because I thought you weren’t blogging as I haven’t been receiving post notifications, so I’ve re signed up to get them as I believe Worstpress is playing games on many fronts. 🙂
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Thank you, Debby. I appreciate your kind words, and that you have continued to follow my blog. 💖
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Looking forward to hearing more about your picture book MS!
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Thank you, Jennie. Fingers crossed.
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Yes!! You should check into Query Tracker. That’s what I’ve been using.
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I’m not sure if Query Tracker works only for US submissions. I’ll have to check it out. I did use it to track a submission to a US agent earlier in the year but eventually forgot to check back when nothing at all happened.
I wish you success with your submissions. 💖
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It is universal. I like that there is a consistent list of agents for all categories.
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I’ll have another look at it. I did just check one book I submitted through Query Tracker and saw that a response had been added in May. I should have checked earlier but I’d forgotten all about it. Just as well it wasn’t an offer. 😅
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I haven’t been there in a month, so who knows what comments might await me. Ha! I do like the site for finding an agent that’s specific to children’s books. Best to you, Norah.
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I hope you find one, Jennie. I’d love to read a book written by you. 🙂
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I feel the same way about your book. 🥰
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Thank you, Jennie. 🙂
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You’re welcome, Norah!
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Fun! And good luck with your book!
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Thank you, Jules.
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I’m glad this ended gently!
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Me too! 🙂
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Norah, you entered the world of play of children brilliantly here, their absolute reality where anything is possible. Good luck with the submission. 😀
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Thank you so much for your support, Annika.
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I love it, Norah! You capture the essence of children at play so well.
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Thank you, Charli. Your comment bring me joy.
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I like the sense of fair play!
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Thank you, Jim. That was the message. 😊
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👍
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I remember loving my hobby horse as a child. Such fun pretend — just like your story. My guess is a plaster is a bandaid? Glad you’re going to turn this into a book.
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Let’s pretend is such fun, isn’t it?
Bandaid is a brand so I used plaster as a generic term. Funny, I thought it was a term from the US. Perhaps I was wrong.
I hope I get to turn it into a book. 🙂
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I remember that longer story! I love the child-ness and the caring in these stories. I sure hope you hear good news regarding the manuscript.
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Thank you, D. I’ll let you know if I do!
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Sweet…
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Thank you, Bette.
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This is great fun, Norah. These are the games my friends and I played as kids.
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Thanks, Robbie. Imaginative games are so much fun.
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Horses are amazing creatures. Jan Sykes wrote a story about one that still stays with me. Lovely story, Norah.
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Thank you, Jacqui.
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lol I’ve had a few nags like that in the Melbourne Cup, and I thought it was a jousting match … well done!
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Thanks, Kate. It was supposed to be a pretend jousting match on hobby horses. 🙂
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yes I got that clearly thanks Norah 🙂
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Great! Thank you. 🙂
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Ha, Silver is safer. Sweet story, good luck with your submission.
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Thanks, Anne. I’ve dotted my ‘i’s and crossed my ‘t’s, and now I’ve got my fingers crossed. 🤞
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