
This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story that seeds generosity. Who is generous and why? Think of generosity as planting a future outcome. Go where the prompt leads!
As for many other qualities and values, I think the seeds of generosity are sown in early childhood. The rewards are reaped throughout life, both for the giver and the recipients of the generosity.
I expected it to be easy to write a story about generosity. However, as with every other prompt, it was a battle to find an idea that wanted to work. When I finally found one and wrote it down, it was over 300 words!
I don’t think I’ve ever written that many words when composing flash before. It’s usually only about 150 words I have to whittle down.
Writing flash fiction is like writing a picture book manuscript. You tell just the bare bones and leave the rest up to the illustrator. However, with flash fiction, there is no illustrator.
Slowly, through six revisions, I condensed the story to 99 words. I hope it still makes sense and that you can paint in the gaps.
The Racing Car
Jamie was spending his birthday money—a rose for Mum, gum for Dad, balloons for Baby and a racing car for himself.
Mr Green counted Jamie’s coins. “You’ve only enough for three.”
Jamie pushed the car aside. “These three, please.”
As Jamie left, Mr Green called, “Wait!” He held out the racing car. Jamie beamed.
Nearly home, Jamie saw a little boy crouched beside a drain. A car, just like Jamie’s, lay far below.
“Foolish boy,” said the mother. “I warned you.” She dragged the howling boy away.
“Wait,” called Jamie, holding out his racing car. The boy beamed.

Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.
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Pure generosity! Straight from the heart. 🙂
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Thank you for your generous comment.
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just perfect, don’t need an illustrator … I could see it clearly!
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Norah, a wonderful, heartwarming story and well done on whittling down the 300 words to a 99!
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Thank you, Annika. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.
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What a delightful boy Jamie is. I’m sure he’s going to go on to become an influencer in many lives, Norah.
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I think so too, Hugh. Thank you.
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I agree with Jacqui – you give a perfect quote about flash writing. I may have to borrow it as I promote my flash memoir. 🙂 Fab 99 word example of GENEROSITY.
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Thanks, Pam. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.
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What a great way to describe flash fiction–“Writing flash fiction is like writing a picture book manuscript. You tell just the bare bones and leave the rest up to the illustrator.” You did just that.
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Thank you, Jacqui. I appreciate your kind words.
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Your story captures and illustrates the heart of generosity beautifully.
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Thank you for your generous comment, Kate.
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A very generous way of spending his birthday money 🙂
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Thank you, Dave. I was hoping that fact would be noticed. And you did. 🙂
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Norah, wow, you have found the ability to take a story with the emotion and message you want to impart to your reader and then reduce it to a word constraint. A picture book is such a constraint. This is not an easy feat to achieve. My writer’s cap is off to you! Well done.
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Thank you for your encouragement, Charli. It was tough to reduce the words. There was so much of the backstory I wanted to tell. Bit by bit I had to cut some out. I’m pleased the essence remained.
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what a wonderful story about generosity; somewhere along the line Jamie learned the beauty of generosity…
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Thank you, Jim. He did. It’s a good lesson to learn.
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Well done, Norah!
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Thank you, Bette.
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Your message came through like rays of sunshine. Well done, Norah! I bravely submitted my first one to Charli. I’ll have to figure out how to post it on my blog.
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Thank you so much, Jennie. I’m looking forward to reading your story. You can place it in a post just like any of your other articles.
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I figured out how to do that, and have it scheduled to post first thing tomorrow. Thank you, Norah!
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I look forward to reading your post. 🙂
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Thank you, Norah.
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There are no gaps in this flash. It is amazing isn’t it, that paring down and eliminating of details, but there it is, the very essence of your story. And you were able to keep Jamie’s second act of generosity. What a great kid!
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Thank you, D. I was worried there wasn’t enough backstory. I knew it so well I couldn’t tell any more. I’m pleased you recognised his two acts of generosity. He’s a fine human being.
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It works very well. No need for more words. A great story too. I agree, the seeds of generosity are planted in the home.
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I agree, Darlene. I’m pleased you noticed that he was already generous before my story began.
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.A lovely story, well worth the torturous revisions.
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Thank you, Anne. I was worried there may not be enough backstory to hold it up.
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Very sweet, Norah!
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Thank you, Pete.
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What a lovely story, Norah. I really loved it.
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Thank you, Robbie.
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Beautiful. Hope the mom lets the boy take Jamie’s racing car.
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I’m sure she will, and that her mood will improve.
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Awwwww. Such a sweet story.
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Thanks, Chelsea.
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