This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about carrot cake. It can be classic or unusual. Why is there cake? How does it feature in the story. Go where the prompt leads.
Carrot cake is great for a celebration, and with Easter just around the corner, I decided to combine the two. I hope you like it.
A carrot cake for Easter
“What will we cook today?” asked Mum.
“Carrot cake!” chimed the twins.
“But you don’t like carrot cake.”
“Carrot cake. Carrot cake.”
“Well, it’s going to be–“
“Easter soon, and we want–“
“to give the Easter Bunny–“
The twins smiled at each other.
“Okay,” smiled Mum. “Carrot cake it is.”
“First, we need the carrots.”
The children raced ahead to the veggie patch.
Their eyes opened wide. The carrot patch was devastated; not one carrot left.
“Carrot cake’s off,” said Mum. “That old rabbit can’t have carrot cake and eat them too.”
Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback, please share your thoughts; and if you can help me with the following two questions, that would be wonderful.
- How should I punctuate the twins’ dialogue to show that they are finishing each other sentences? Have I done it correctly? If not, how should I have shown it? I checked my style guide and online and couldn’t find an explanation.
- Word counted the em dashes I have used to punctuate the interruptions, but I haven’t. Should I have? Most punctuation is not counted as words.
Thanks for your advice.