Freedom #99WordStories

This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about what freedom feels like. Whose point of view do you use? Does the idea of freedom cause tension or bring hope? Let the reader feel the freedom. Go where the prompt leads!

Last week, the prompt was Danger Zone. My story saw a couple of playful children ‘trapped by quicksand’. I thought it appropriate to free them this week. My story begins where the last one finished. I hope you enjoy it.

We’re Free!

Help! Save us!

What’s wrong?

Can’t you see? We’re sinking. It’s quicksand! Help!

I’ll save you! I’ll pull you out!

Quick!

Okay. Stay right there! I’ll get a rope.

Jane, Jane. Quick, Give me your rope. The boys are sinking in quicksand. We have to get them out — before it’s too late.

I’ll come too.

Where are you going?

We have to save the boys! They’re sinking! It’s quicksand!

Quicksand? I’ll help too.

Quick! Grab the rope! Now, everyone, on the count of three, one, two, three, pu-ull! Pu-ull! Pu-ull!

Made it! You saved us! We’re free! Thank you.

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Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.

Note: The collection of stories made in response to the previous prompt Danger Zone, including mine, can be read at the Carrot Ranch.

30 thoughts on “Freedom #99WordStories

  1. Liz H

    Knowing that the child’s world is often where your 99 are set, this brought me right back to my own childhood and kids’ games. Quicksand figured prominently for us! ❤

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    1. Norah Post author

      Thanks, D. I try to make it authentic. Having spent most of my life with young children, I’d worry if I couldn’t. (Particularly when I say that I’m just a six-year-old at heart.)

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  3. Prior...

    This has a beautiful word balance – with the two janes (“Jane, Jane”) to beckon and then the way they counted one ten three and then there were three pu-ull
    And I felt the urgency to then have a successful ending (and girls residing boys – right on)

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