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Playing to Win #Valentiny Contest Entry

Playing to Win #Valentiny Contest Entry

I have regularly joined in responding to the 99-word flash fiction prompts at the Carrot Ranch for almost seven years. Today, I am joining in something a little different — a Valentiny Contest run by children’s author Susanna Leonard Hill. Although this is the sixth Valentiny Contest, this is the first I have entered.

The contest asks writers to write Valentines story appropriate for children (children here defined as ages 12 and under) maximum 214 words in which someone feels brave! The maximum story length is to be 214 words (get it? 2/14 for Valentines Day), but it can be less. For more details and to read other entries, pop over to Susanna’s blog. Entries must be posted by Sunday February 14th by 11:59 PM EDT. (Words in italics are from Susanna’s post.)

My story is not specifically to do with Valentines’ Day, but I was pleased to find that the name Valentina means brave. Fergal also means brave. I have been brave to have a go. The word count of my story is 214 words exactly. I hope you enjoy it.

Playing to Win

On one side of the arena, Prince Fergal raised his sword. “I am the bravest of the brave, the strongest of the strong. No one can defeat me.”

On the opposite side, Princess Valentina raised her sword. “I am the bravest of the brave, the strongest of the strong. No one can defeat me. I challenge you to a duel.”

“I am Fearless Fergal!”

“I am Valiant Valentina!”

“Charge!”

The riders kicked their hobby horses into action. Across the arena they galloped, swords drawn, ready for mortal combat.

As they neared the centre of the arena, Fearless Fergal’s horse stumbled, flinging him to the ground.

“Ouch!” he cried, clasping an elbow.

The spectators held their breath. What would Valentina do? Would she drive her sword home and declare herself the victor? Would she insist that Fergal be her faithful follower forever more? Was there any way Fergal could claim victory?

Fergal didn’t look so fearless clutching his arm and rocking from side to side.

Valentina released her sword and leapt from her steed. She knelt beside him.

“Are you okay, Fergal?” she asked.

The spectators swarmed.

Fergal nodded. “It’s just a little graze.”

“Shall we go again?” Valentina asked.

“Another day. Let’s play something else now.”

The contest done. The crowd dispersed. Friendship won.

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44 responses to “Playing to Win #Valentiny Contest Entry”

  1. The Big Black Horse | Norah Colvin Avatar

    […] That story is based upon another 214-word story I wrote earlier in the year, which you can read here. All three are the same but different. I hope you like […]

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  2. nightlake Avatar

    Kindness and friendship win and there is no space for gloating. A lovely story.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you for reading and for your lovely comment.

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  3. Jules Avatar

    The best situation when things end in ‘win-win’.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I think so. 🙂

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  4. Anne Goodwin's Sugar and Snails is free in February Avatar

    What a lovely story. Yes, you were brave to enter but maybe the other entrants were braver to compete against you 😉

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Some wonderful stories were entered, Anne. I’m not sure of the total but well over 200. Fourteen finalists were chosen and they are available on the site for people to vote for their favourite. I look forward to finding out which one wins. It’s difficult to choose. Mine didn’t make the cut but I’m okay with that. I had a go against tough competition. If you have time, you could vote too. 🙂

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  5. Prior... Avatar

    hi Norah
    i think my other comment disappeared

    but i enjoyed the action and it felt longer than 200+ words’ which is how good fiction flows – eh? has depth
    anyhow / the way you allowed is to enjoy this youthful exchange had that potent closing sentence – brought closure and the done and won added a light touch in the way a rhyme pleases the mind at times
    😉

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  6. Prior... Avatar

    did my comment make it?

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  7. LucciaGray Avatar

    Lovely story. Valentina values friendship more than winning! 🤩

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    1. Norah Avatar

      She does. Friendship is win-win!

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  8. Jennie Avatar

    Lovely story, Norah. Friendship is the most powerful of all.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      It really is, Jennie. It gives us strength.

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  9. Jim Borden Avatar

    what a nice story; friendship wins out in the end…

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Jim.

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  10. Hugh W. Roberts Avatar

    Aww, you nailed it, Norah. I love the message your story teaches anyone who reads it.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you for your kind words, Hugh. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.

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  11. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

    Oh, precious friendship. Thank you for sharing, Norah! Happy Valentine to you!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Miriam. I hope you had a lovely Valentines’ Day.

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      1. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

        We had a wonderful day, Norah. It was snowing on the third day in Portland where my daughter is. The kids were playing sledding on the school ground near by. They had a blast.

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Sounds fun!

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  12. Book Club Mom Avatar

    Great story – friendship won – I love that line!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Barbara. Friendship always wins in my books. 🙂

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  13. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    Lovely story. I enjoyed it.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Jacqui.

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  14. dgkaye Avatar

    Fun post with good lessons. Friendship counts 🙂 x

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby. Friendship always wins for me. 🙂

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      1. dgkaye Avatar

        Absolutely! 🙂

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  15. calmkate Avatar

    oh so super cute, love it!

    Hobby horse gladiators who learnt the lesson so quickly 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Kate. I appreciate your kind support.

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      1. calmkate Avatar

        my pleasure Norah, this is such a fun joyful post!

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Thank you again. 💖

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  16. Kate Avatar

    You have a talent for capturing the behaviours of children in words. I could see the fight and yes the ending was perfect. Friendship won.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much for your kind words, Kate. Appreciated.

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  17. Darlene Avatar

    What a delightful story. Well done. xo

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much for your kind comment, Darlene.

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  18. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This is a lovely story, Norah. I’m glad friendship won.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Robbie. I like it when friendship wins. 🙂

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  19. Rebecca Glaessner Author Avatar

    Yay! I love this. I see so many kids show kindness like this in the real world. It never ceases to warm the heart.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Rebecca. I agree. I’m pleased it rang true for you too. 🙂

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  20. Chel Owens Avatar

    Very cute! I like it!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Chelsea.

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