Flash fiction – Innocence shattered

Here is my contribution to the seventh flash fiction challenge from Carrot Ranch Communications. I hope you enjoy it.

In 99 words (no more, no less) write a biography for a character, alter-ego or you. 

Innocence shattered

She hurled it with such force that had it been his head, as she had wished it was, it too would have smashed into smithereens, just as the figurine had.

“You ab-so-lute monster!” she screamed.

She fell to the floor, sobbing uncontrollably.

All her life she had thought it was her; something wrong with her; she that was wanting.

But it wasn’t her. It was him. His wanting. His vile taking.

The repulsive visions made her want to turn inside out and eradicate any trace of connection.

Her ignorance had offered no protection; and now no solace.

 

I welcome your comments.

18 thoughts on “Flash fiction – Innocence shattered

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  2. Nanny Shecando

    My first thoughts are that it’s very dark. As a reader I like that there’s so much left open to my own interpretation, it’s only as dark as my own perception and yet I’d love to have had more to read. I’m one to judge a book by it’s cover (or it’s blurb) and right now you’ve got me captured wanting to delve in and read more.

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    1. Norah Post author

      Thank you for your generous comment. I hadn’t thought of the 99 words as a blurb but i can see that it almost could be. One day I may take it further, but not just yet. Will you join in the flash fiction challenge too? It can be a lot of fun.

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      1. Nanny Shecando

        I’m not sure I’m at all equipped to participate in the flash fiction challenge. My writing skills don’t extend that far. At the moment I’m more than happy to continue reading and enjoying your creations 🙂

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        1. Norah Post author

          It is something new for me too. You have a lot going on over at your blog so I appreciate you have other priorities. Not long now until your first party!

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          1. Nanny Shecando

            It’s true, there’s much in the works for my blog at the moment. It’s a battle just to get published posts out what with everything else behind the scenes. I’m hoping you’ll be joining the party every now and then when you’re feeling so inclined.

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  4. Charli Mills

    Had to laugh at Anne’s comment on ab-so-lute! Hmmm…connected by hyphens, good to call it one word! Powerful writing and so true. Often what occurs in childhood seems absolutely monstrous when revealed to the adult mind. That’s my interpretation. Very powerful.

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    1. Norah Post author

      Thanks Charli. It is interesting, though, about the hyphens. When every word counts we have to make the most of them. It may have been a waste if the hyphens meant the word counted as three. Maybe the emphasis I was looking for would have had to be achieved another way?

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    1. Norah Post author

      Thanks Lisa. Not ready to reveal yet. You will just have to guess for a while longer. Sorry. Maybe when/if I decide to explore beyond the 99 word limit?

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