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Beware or Be Scared — a Halloweensie story

Susanna Leonard Hill is hosting the 12th Halloweensie Contest and entries close on Monday 31 October. You may still have time to enter. All you have to do is write a 100-word Halloween-themed story for children up to 12 and include the words slither, treat and scare. Easy right? Pop over to Susanna’s amazing blog for all the rules, and join in if you dare. There are some pretty amazing prizes.

You will be able to read all the entries in the comments section of the Official Contest Post after the weekend. By next weekend, Susanna hopes to have narrowed the field down to about twelve stories for readers to vote on. What a mammoth task.

Since I’ve been practising writing brief stories in the Carrot Ranch flash fiction challenges, I thought I’d have a go at this one too and, I guess not surprisingly, I’ve done it in 99 words (you’re allowed to go under, but not over, 100 words). While my flash fiction stories often feature children, this one had to be for children. I hope I didn’t make it too scary, but I aimed it at the older, rather than younger, age group, who I hope may ‘get’ some of the nuances with word choice and punctuation. I hope you enjoy it. You are forewarned.

Beware or be Scared

Nathara expected her ginormous jelly Poisonous Pythons, individually sealed for hygiene safety, to make the children’s eyes POP! And they did. Laced, through the fence the treats were irresistible. Children ignored the “BEWARE” sign. They failed to read the small print “Open only after midnight.” They didn’t flinch when Nathara laughed, “Mwahahaha!” and found no reason to be scared when she hissed, “Enjoy eating children!” They couldn’t wait to tuck into the squishy, sweet, stickiness of the enormous Poisonous Pythons and ripped the seals apart. Nathara’s slippery servants slithered free and wrapped the trick-or-treaters in their squishy sweet stickiness.

For a follow up to this story, check out my response to this week’s Carrot Ranch prompt ‘bones’, Make No Bones About It.

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17 responses to “Beware or Be Scared — a Halloweensie story”

  1. Jules Avatar

    That fine print’ll getcha everytime!!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      That’s right. Best beware!

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      1. Jules Avatar

        *ooooh…oooh!*

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  2. dgkaye Avatar

    Great story Norah. I enjoyed eating the children, lol. Might be scary for the little ones. But that’s Halloween. 🙂 x

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby. I’m pleased you noticed that statement about eating children. I was worried the meaning might be missed.

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  3. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    HI Norah, it depends on the age of the children as to whether this would be scary. It probably would be scary for very young children. I think Roald Dahl’s books are aimed at a 9 – 14 years old readership and I think some of them, like The Witches, and James and the Giant Peach, have very scary bits. Much more scary than your child squeezing jelly snakes.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Yes, Dahl’s stories can be quite dark. It sounds like I pitched the scare factor about right. Thanks for confirming that. You’re much better at scary than I am.

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  4. Anne Goodwin Avatar

    “Enjoy eating children!” indeed.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      😅😂 I’m pleased you noticed my punctuation, Anne. I was worried it would go unnoticed, except by the most discerning of readers, of course. Thank you.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Too scary?

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      1. Jacqui Murray Avatar

        Well, I’m a cozy girl, so… maybe…

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        1. Norah Avatar

          I wondered. 🙂

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  5. Bones #99Word Stories | Norah Colvin Avatar

    […] eluded me. I finally decided to go all-out horror, which is unusual for me, to follow up my entry Beware or Be Scared in the Halloweensie Contest run by Susanna Leonard Hill. That entry was meant to be as Halloween […]

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