
This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story that features a red convertible. Who is driving or riding? Where is the car going? Maybe it isn’t even a car. Have fun and go where the prompt leads!
Royal’s Red Convertible
When I was a child, my uncle, who was probably in his early thirties and single at the time, had a red convertible. His name was Royal (Royal Albert, no less) and I thought he looked like Elvis Presley. He had a great sense of humour, and when he laughed, he did so with his whole body. Whenever he came to visit, we kids would beg him for a ride. He always complied. We felt like royalty as he whizzed us around the block, the wind in our hair, smiling as wide as the Pacific. It was Royal fun!
Charli did say to go where the prompt leads, and how could I write a post about a red convertible without paying respects to my uncle and the only times I got to ride in a red convertible, or any convertible for that matter. Sadly, we lost Royal twenty years ago to melanoma, a terrible disease that takes too many lives here in Queensland.
From memoir to fiction.
The Little Red Convertible V1
Teddy plumped into the driver’s seat. Ollie squished beside.
“Where’re we going, Teddy?”
“Somewhere far away, where the flowers bloom and the birds sing and the sky’s the prettiest blue.”
“How long will it take to get there?”
“Close your eyes and we’ll be there before you know it,” said Teddy.
The little red convertible zoomed past dancing horses and gilded carriages.
“Do you see it?” asked Teddy.
“It’s beautiful!” whispered Ollie, not wanting to break the magic.
When the little red convertible stopped, Ollie asked, “Can we go again?”
“Anytime,” said Teddy. “Just close your eyes and imagine.”
When I was writing that one, I was thinking of a little red car on a carousel. However, I couldn’t find an image to match. I quite liked the image of the two children and the pedal car, so I thought I’d have another go. For this one, I was thinking of playing imaginatively in the backyard or playground. I don’t think either are really what I could call finished, though each is 99 words, as is Royal’s Red Convertible, but I’ve run out of time. Let me know which you prefer.
The Little Red Convertible V2
“Where to today?” asked Amy.
“Over the mountains, across the river, and through the far-away forest,” said Lucy.
“Be home in time for dinner,” said Mother.
“We will!”
The little red convertible chugged to the peak of the highest mountain where the children danced in clouds. It rolled through misty valleys and onto the plain where the children played hide-and-seek in patchwork fields. It trundled across the wooden bridge over the river that led to the forest where they fluttered with fairies and pranced with unicorns.
Rumbling bellies told them to head for home.
“Just in time,” said Mother.

Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.
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Why do I have to choose between either of them? They’re both wonderful and definitely feel like the children are realistic, from your memories. ~Nan
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment, and not choosing one story over the other, Nan. 😊
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I really like both versions!
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Thank you, Nicole.
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Hey Norah!
I like V2 – perhaps because the last line leaves an impression.
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That’s great to know. Thank you for your comment.
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Isn’t it great when writing prompts can bring back happy memories that had not surfaced for a while, Norah? Your uncle sounds like he was an amazing man.
I liked both of your stories, but the one about Teddy and Ollie made me smile the most. I loved the line ‘“Just close your eyes and imagine.”
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Thank you for your lovely comment, Hugh, and for reading all my stories. I’m pleased Teddy and Ollie is getting a few votes. 🙂
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Funny how prompts can bring us back to childhood memories. I enjoyed them both Norah, but chose #2 as the best one. 🙂 x
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It is funny, Debby, and I was pleased to recall this one. I hadn’t thought of Royal and his little red sports car for a while.
Thank you for voting on my stories. I think #2 is the favourite so far.
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My pleasure Norah ❤
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Every child should have an Uncle Royal. How fortunate you were, and his memories are still with you. Honestly, I like both your stories. I can’t pick a favorite!
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They should! If only we could arrange it. You could say he was a ‘prince’ among uncles, but I had some other pretty special uncles too.
Thank you for your kind words about my stories.
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Aww… that’s wonderful! You’re welcome, Norah.
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Thank you, Jennie. 💖
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You are welcome, Norah.
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Hi Norah, I am sorry to hear about your uncle. Skin cancer is a big problem here too. I like both the stories, but the second a tad more.
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Thank you, Robbie. It was nice to be reminded of my uncle in this way.
Thanks for voting on my stories. I think the second is the favourite overall.
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Love them! ❤ Sharing…
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Thanks so much, Bette.
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I love them both and how mice it made you think of your uncle.
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Thank you, Darlene. I hadn’t thought of Royal in a little while, so I was pleased the prompt brought him to mind too. 💖
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Great memory for kids. Lovely stories, both of them.
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Thanks, Jacqui. I think I’ll work on both a little more. See if I can make something of them. I like it when I get ideas from the prompts. 🙂
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Always good to read about happy memories. Reminds me of my first motorcycle ride…
May ‘Uncle Royal’s’ Memories be for blessings. (((Hugs)))
I enjoyed both of your stories. Imagination can take us anywhere. And that Red Convertible can even sprout wings!!
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It was wonderful to think about Royal and his car. And yes, imagination can take us anywhere!
Thank you for your lovely comment, Jules.
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🙂
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This prompt served as a great vehicle to share your Royal uncle with us. I am so glad you did. I enjoyed both stories with the children but if you insist on a preference it would be the second. It was more clear to me and I loved the ending of getting back just in time to quell their hunger.
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It was a great vehicle indeed. I enjoyed the memory ride.
Thank you for your comparison of the two stories. I felt the same. I hadn’t worked hard enough on the first before finding the image I used for the second. 🙂
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Love it. I’m sorry about your grandfather. I love the story with Teddy and Ollie best.
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Hi Chelsea, it’s so lovely to see you. Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate your vote for Teddy and Ollie. 💖
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OOOH!! I just love them both! 🙂
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Thank you so much, Robin.
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three for the price of one! what a nice way to pay tribute to the memory of your uncle
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Thanks, Jim. Yes, he was a very special man.
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and it seemed like he enjoyed life to the fullest…
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I think he did. 💖
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👍
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