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A Muddy Conclusion #flashfiction

Last week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story embraces the mud. What is the mud, real or metaphor? How does it transform a character or place? What happens? Go where the prompt leads!

Although Charli gave an extended time in which to respond, I wrote my story Mud Cake Recipe in the usually one-week allocation. Some of your lovely comments encouraged me to continue the story a little further, which I have done here.

I hope you like it.

A Muddy Conclusion

“It’s just mud. It’ll wash off.”

“But it’s everywhere. Those children are unruly. My children would never —”

“And where are your children now?”

“Hmpff!” said the neighbour, stomping home, muttering about impudence, inconsideration and downright rudeness. “You haven’t heard the last of this.”

“Come on,” said the mother. “Let’s get you and the fence cleaned up.”

With buckets, brushes and rags, the children washed the fence. When it was done, they turned on each other. “Bullseye! Got you!”  They tussled and tumbled. Laughter filled the air.

The neighbour glowered at the mud-covered children. “Well, I never,” she said.

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28 responses to “A Muddy Conclusion #flashfiction”

  1. Jennie Avatar

    Well done, Norah!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Jennie. 🙂

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome, Norah!

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  2. dgkaye Avatar

    Good one Norah. Maybe the neighbor needs a mud pie? Lol 🙂 x

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Maybe, Debby. 😉😅

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  3. Jules Avatar

    Reminds me of the High Class Victorian addage that Children should be seen and not heard.
    I’d be in that mud. But yes clean up is a must if you make a mess 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Cleaning up the messy mud can be as much fun as making it. 🙂

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  5. Charli Mills Avatar

    At least they made the pies outside! Maybe the neighbor needs to join in next time.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I think so, Charli. She might lighten up and find life enjoyable.

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  6. Jim Borden Avatar

    kids will be kids; and grouches will be grouches…

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    1. Norah Avatar

      And never the twain should meet. 🤣

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      1. Jim Borden Avatar

        let’s hope… 🙂

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  7. calmkate Avatar

    lol you describe the nosey old miserable neighbour well … seldom do their kids visit and they wonder why …

    Glad the kids got into it again 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Yes. There’s a marked difference between the neighbours’ offspring.

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  8. Anne Goodwin is bringing Matilda Windsor home Avatar

    The whole notion of washing the fence is hilarious, although maybe it’s different if you don’t get much rain.

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  9. roughwighting Avatar

    And I bet the neighbor never did – play in the mud. What a “stick-in-the-mud” person. Sad. And where are her children? Probably stuck at home in front of their screens. ;-0 Good conclusion, Norah.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Yep. I think you got that right about the neighbour, Pam. 😉

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  10. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar

    Love it Norah! An interesting and lively neighborhood is emerging from the mud prompt.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, D. I’m pleased you found the characters interesting.

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  11. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    Hi Norah, this is such a lovely piece. It brings back suck pleasant memories of when my boys were little and played for hours with sand and water.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you for your kind words, Robbie. I’m pleased it brought back happy memories for you.

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  12. Susan Scott Avatar

    Ha ha! Mud glorious mud … I agree with Pete – neighbour needs to take chill pill or 6 …

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Indeed she does. 🙂

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  13. petespringerauthor Avatar
    petespringerauthor

    Good one, Norah. The neighbor needs to chill out.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      She does. If I’d had time, I’d have given a bit of backstory to the neighbour. Perhaps another time.

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