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The One Who Left the Dress #99WordStories

This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about “the one who left the dress.” A 1940s-era dress still hangs in an abandoned house. Who left it and why? You can take any perspective and write in any genre. It can be a ghost story. Or not. Go where the prompt leads!

For this story, I tried to write a little more about Sandy and Angus from my story last week. When I did, I wrote a lot more, well a lot more than 99 words anyway, so I’ve had to pare it back and take away a lot of the backstory. I hope that what remains makes sense on its own, and that you enjoy it.

The One Who Left the Dress

The rotten timbers remained upright thanks to the bushes, branches and vines. Grassy tufts sprouted through decaying floorboards where leaves, animal scats and other detritus littered. The only hint of previous occupants was a wardrobe, miraculously still standing. Sandy gasped as its door fragmented as she opened it. Using her phone’s torch, she peered through cobwebs and dust, hoping for treasure. All she found was a dress, completely in tatters, but still hanging.

“Isn’t this your great grandmother’s — the one in the photo in the hall?”

“Could be.” said Angus. “So what?”

“I wonder why she left it here.”

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Thank you for reading, I appreciate your feedback, please share your thoughts.

Note: The collection of stories made in response to the previous prompt Remote, including mine, can be read at the Carrot Ranch.

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35 responses to “The One Who Left the Dress #99WordStories”

  1. Liz H Avatar

    This begs for a par 2! I’m intrigued…

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      1. Norah Avatar

        I read it that way. 😊

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Liz. I’ll see what I can do.

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  3. Jules Avatar

    We only know the true importance to those things that we own.
    Unless someone had a hidden diary! Lovely story.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      A diary. Now that’s a thought. 😊

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  4. Jennie Avatar

    Well done, Norah, especially the ending that leaves us a bit hanging (pun intended.)

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I love your pun, Jennie. Thank you. 😂💖

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome! 😀

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  5. dgkaye Avatar

    Well done Norah. You packed a punch of a story in so few words. ❤

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby. I’m pleased the message was there.

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  6. Patricia Tilton Avatar

    Loved your take on the dress. So much rich detail is so few words. But why was it there? When I looked at the promp I immediately thought about a dress hidden by a woman who was waiting to elope, but didn’t. It’s fun what pops into everyone’s mind.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      That would be an interesting story too. Your suggestion just popped another idea into my head for this week’s prompt, but I don’t think I’ll follow it. I like to focus on the children rather than the adults. Thank you for your thoughtful comment.

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  7. Bette A. Stevens Avatar
    Bette A. Stevens

    Great!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Bette.

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  8. Hugh W. Roberts Avatar

    Intriguing, Norah, and quite creepy, too. And a great cliffhanger to end on.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      It is a bit of both, Hugh. Thank you for your comment.

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  9. Jim Borden Avatar

    wonderful response to the prompt. I felt like I was in the room with Sandy and Angus, and you left me wanting more. Not bad for 99 words!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks for your encouraging words, Jim. thanks for looking in.

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  10. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    HI Norah, that most certainly is a good question. Now you will have to answer it [smile]

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m working on an answer, Robbie. Thank you for your curiosity. 😊

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  11. Anne Goodwin Avatar

    You really capture the decay and intrigue. Great take on the prompt.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Anne.

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  12. Nicole Horlings Avatar

    Well written! The contrast of the decaying house with the dress left behind creates a delicious mystery.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Nicole. I appreciate your comment.

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  13. Prior... Avatar

    I like the torch of the cellphone bringing the very modern element – as well as the “so what” to show younger generation attitude

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Yvette. I’m pleased those aspects worked for you.

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      1. Prior... Avatar

        ☀️😊🌸

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  14. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar

    Such detail. Have you been through a decaying house? This reminded me of being a kid and exploring old rotting abandoned buildings. But now these two are faced with a mystery. I’ll come by for the next installment! 😃

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I can’t promise a next installment, but I’ll consider it. 😂 I have been through a decaying house, but it wasn’t like this one. This one was painted with my imagination.

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  15. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    Interesting take on that picture, Norah!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Jacqui. Interesting is good. 😊

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