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Change is Coming #99WordStories

When I read Charli’s prompt at the Carrot Ranch this week to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story to reflect the theme, “ready for a change.” Who is ready and why? How does the change unfold? What happened to initiate the change? Go where the prompt leads! I immediately thought of this Cat Stevens song.

As a young adult, I loved Cat Stevens’s songs and their messages of hope for better days. As an older adult, I still do. We could certainly do with some changes around the world at the moment.

I was lucky to see Cat Stevens in concert in 1972, which must have been about the same time as this video was recorded. It was amazing. So much wisdom. Sadly, we don’t seem to be any closer to the vision of these lyrics 50 years later.

‘Don’t you feel the day is coming

And it won’t be too soon

When the people of the world

Can all live in one room’

It took me a while to get past the Cat Stevens musical memory lane, but this is where I ended up. I hope you like it.

Change is coming

‘Get up,’ Pauline whispered.

He rubbed his eyes. ‘Why?’

‘Shh! He’s here.’

He trembled. ‘Take Rabbit?’

Out they crept, sliding against the wall to the door. A shout from downstairs. They froze. Pauline turned the knob. Quietly. Quietly. She pushed the door. Gently. Gently. Then cool air. Silent toes pattered down the stairs. Across the grass they ran and ran. All three, hand-in-hand. Pauline in front. Rabbit behind.

Finally, they banged on a door. ‘Grandpa! Grandpa! He’s come.’

Grandpa was in the doorway, ushering them into Grandma’s arms, picking up the phone.

‘Hush,’ said Grandma. ‘Everything will be alright.’

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Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.

Note: The collection of stories made in response to the previous prompt Free Pie can be read at the Carrot Ranch here.

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60 responses to “Change is Coming #99WordStories”

  1. Margaret Avatar

    Poor Pauline, having to be so grown up to protect herself and her brother. They’ve obviously had to go through this routine more than once. I feel the tension in their home, and the refuge they find in their grandparents’. ‘Rabbit’ is a lovely touch, too.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you for your thorough assessment of my story, Margaret. You understood completely.

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  3. Liz H Avatar

    Very suspenseful. I feel like I really want a Part 2, to know if it’s good suspense, or the scary kind. Next week’s flash, perhaps? Please?

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    1. Norah Avatar

      There’s a little more in continuation, but probably not the answer you are seeking. Thank you for your interest.

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  4. Marsha Avatar

    So whoever “he” is he scares them to death. “Out they crept, sliding against the wall to the door.” They were very quiet. The person or thing that came in was shouting. Probably normal. One parent at least is missing because no parent accompanies them only Rabbit, unless Rabbit is a person. They live near to Grandma and Grandpa. Grandpa calls the police, and voila, things are going to be all right. Apparently Grandpa is not too scared of this person, and since they live close, I’m guessing that the “he” is either their son and the other parent is out of the picture, dead or alive. It looks like poor rabbit in the photo got dropped along the way. Excellent mystery, Norah. It’s not one that can be skimmed. Bad Marsha!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks for your detailed assessment, Marsha. Most of what you have extracted is what I intended, but not all. My intention was that ‘he’ is the bad father turning up with evil intent. The shouting is not normal, but the mother’s parents (Grandpa and Grandma) are ready and the call will be made to save the family. The children were primed and knew just what to do if he turned up.

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      1. Marsha Avatar

        Fabulous story. Sorry it took so long for it to sink in. So where was mom?

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Mum was in the house being shouted at, and more.

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          1. Marsha Avatar

            Okay. That makes it even more frightening. I just watched an interesting Netflix film called the Kindness of Strangers. The mother took her two children and ran to NYC to get away from an abusive man who was also a policeman. Very powerful. Your short story could almost be an intro to that except that she did not have parents who could help.

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            1. Norah Avatar

              It does sound like that Marsha. I appreciate the time (and number of times) that you took to fully understand my story. That is a wonderful affirmation for me. Thank you. 💖

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              1. Marsha Avatar

                It was well worth the time. I must have Aphasia!

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                1. Norah Avatar

                  I don’t think so. In fact, I know you don’t. We’re just busy people and try to read more than we can by skim reading. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn’t work quite so well. You’re always appreciated. 💖

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                  1. Marsha Avatar

                    Thank you so much!

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                    1. Norah Avatar

                      Thank you. 💖

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  5. Gloria Avatar

    You see it brought me back to when we were children; always a puppy or a kitten following close behind. We did have rabbits and guinea pigs too. Hamsters and mice….oh and a duck! 🤣

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I hope they were good memories, Gloria.

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      1. Gloria Avatar

        They sure were!

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  6. Gloria Avatar

    I’m thinking their pet rabbit follows them everywhere. By the end I’m not so sure. Mmm…

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks for your comment, Gloria. I’m always interested to hear what readers think. That helps me know if my writing has been effective.

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  7. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar

    That was a creepy suspenseful flash. Unless I’m filling in the blanks too darkly. But I believe Granma. Everything will be all right.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I think you’re filling in correctly. And I think Grandma is right too. 🙂

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  8. Jennie Avatar

    This story could have many endings, and could have had many beginnings. You wrote from the middle. I love Cat Stevens. Change can be good or not so good.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I did write the middle. The rest was for the reader to consider.
      I thought you might like Cat Stevens too, and I agree with you about change.

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        Yes, I do. Thanks, Norah.

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  10. Charli Mills Avatar

    This story packed a wallop, Norah. I was right there with those young ones, running. Heartwrenching and well-crafted.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Charli. They’re safe now.

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  11. Darlene Avatar

    I love the Cat Stevens song. There is always change, some good, some not so.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      That’s the truth about change, Darlene. I wish it was always for the better.

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  12. Story Chat Y2 Summary – “Sweet Feeling” by Yvette Prior – Marsha Ingrao – Always Write Avatar

    […] Norah What a lovely story. My mind raced into all sorts of places as I read but the story didn’t follow me anywhere. It was a sweet ending to a story that I thought may have been tragic. Why would I expect something sinister from you? […]

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  13. Marsha Avatar

    I haven’t heard that Cat Stevens song either. I got lost about who “he” was who was coming. Was it the Easter Bunny? I am linking this post to your comment for Story Chat Summary this month. Thanks for your wonderful participation.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Definitely not the Easter Bunny, Marsha. 🙂
      Thanks for the link. 🙂

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      1. Marsha Avatar

        Okay, what clue did I miss? I’m coming back to read Change… again. Now I’m really curious.

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Perhaps my clues weren’t obvious enough. Not enough said. 🙂

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          1. Marsha Avatar

            Your clues were fine once I slowed down and thought about each sentence.

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            1. Norah Avatar

              Thanks, Marsha. 🙂

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  14. Hugh W. Roberts Avatar

    So many possibilities as to what or who ‘He’ is, Norah. At first, I thought it was Father Christmas, but (other than my sister), who would want to run away from Santa? Then my mind went to the story of the three little pigs and the big, bad wolf.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      The three little pigs is probably closer to my intention. Thank you, Hugh.

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  15. Jim Borden Avatar

    I am a big fan of Cat Stevens, but I have to admit this is one song I am not that familiar with – but it was quite nice to listen to. and your story is leaving us all in suspense!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m pleased you enjoyed listening to Cat, Jim. It was nice for me to walk down memory lane. 🙂

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      1. Jim Borden Avatar

        music from our youth often brings back good memories…

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Yes. Usually. 🙂

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  16. Anne Goodwin is bringing Matilda Windsor home Avatar

    Doesn’t strike me as a good change, I’m thinking an abusive father back from prison …?

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    1. Norah Avatar

      That’s certainly fitting to the story, Anne. I hope Grandpa’s call is in time. Thank you for your comment.

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  17. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    I have no idea what will happen, but I’m hopeful. Lovely story and good discussion of change, which I hate!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m pleased you are hopeful, Jacqui. I was hoping for that. Thank you. 🙂

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  18. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This is a bit reminiscent for me of the book, When Hitler Stole Pink Rabbit. A great piece, Norah.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Robbie. I haven’t read or seen When Hitler Stole Pink Rabbit. I’ll put it on my list.

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  19. Prior... Avatar

    I like how you led us there with the Memory lane of music (that concert mus have been great) and then the idea of humanity in one room…
    In the fiction –
    Liked how you repeated quietly, gently and ran! Had such a nice effect….
    And now – who has come? Hmm

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Yvette. The concert was amazing. One of my favourites.
      I’m pleased the repetition has the desired effect. It’s hard to know which words to choose sometimes when the number is limited.
      That’s the question – who has come? I was hoping readers might share their thoughts to see if they matched mine. 🙂

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      1. Prior... Avatar

        Well
        I think the bad guys came!

        And the first repetition was quiet (to me) – the second one slowed me down and I felt like I was hunched over taking tip toe steps
        And by the third – I smiled
        I was still immersed in the flash of fiction but felt the beauty of the doubles
        It worked so well
        And my least favorite flash fictions are ones that overuse conjunctions –
        Especially the “but”
        Word

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Thank you so much for your elaboration, Yvette. I appreciate it.
          I’ll try to avoid the ‘but’. 🙂

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          1. Prior... Avatar

            Well only avoid it if it doesn’t fit – ya know? Because just like you repeated here – there are times for conjunctions and many of them – I guess it spends

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            1. Norah Avatar

              We try to suit the style to story, don’t we?

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              1. Prior... Avatar

                yes….
                🙂

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