Live Love Laugh Learn … Create the possibilities

Does a substitute fulfil a promise?

promises broken with substitutes

This week at the Carrot Ranch, D. Avery stepped in (substituted) for Charli Mills by posing the weekly flash fiction prompt. (Charli is working industriously on her thesis for submission this week!)

D. Avery’s challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that features a substitution. How might a character or situation be impacted by a stand-in? Bonus points for fairy tale elements. Go where the prompt leads.

I recently posed a question about the effectiveness of rewards. Aligned with that are promises of rewards and threats of punishment — strategies used by parents (and others) in an attempt to control another’s behaviour.

I think the conversation around that previous post must have somehow influenced my response to this prompt. See what you think.

I won’t elaborate any further on rewards and punishments for now, but will allow the flash to speak for itself. I don’t get the bonus points for including fairy tale elements. I’m sorry to say that scenes like this are more real than fairy tale.

Special Substitution

“Where’s my Burger Special? You promised!”

“Here, sweetie.”

“Burger Specials have chips, not carrot sticks!”

The carrot sticks plummeted to the floor.

“I substituted them, hon. Carrot sticks are healthier. We want to be healthy, don’t we?”

A mouthful of half-chewed bun adorned the table. “That’s disgusting!”

“Multi-grain’s healthier. Try some more. You will like it.”

“I don’t want substitutes.”

The poorly-disguised plant-based patty frisbeed across the room.

The parent hauled the protester from the restaurant.

“You promised Burger Special!”

“You’ll get something special, as soon as we get home.”

“There’s no substitute for proper parenting,” tut-tutted a diner.

Thank you blog post

Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.

Comments

41 responses to “Does a substitute fulfil a promise?”

  1. LucciaGray Avatar

    It’s not easy to be a parents nowadays…well shown in the flash:)

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      It’s definitely not easy. I think the guide books for our parents were easier – do what you’re told – because I said so – but I think a more democratic approach is better for us all in the long run. It’s difficult to get right without guidance though. Even with guidance, it is still difficult.

      Liked by 2 people

  2. Jennie Avatar

    Loved that last line!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Jennie. I’m not really in favour of people passing judgement. It’s too easy to do that, but in this instance, they’re right. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  3. Sam "Goldie" Kirk Avatar

    Are you SPYING on me?
    A very amusing, yet serious piece. Probably my fav this week.
    Stay golden!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much for your lovely comment, Sam. No, I’m not spying on YOU. But I do see this sort of behaviour more frequently than I would wish.

      Liked by 1 person

  4. Sarah Brentyn Avatar

    Sorry, I’m with Jacqui here. Not on my watch. Gah! (That said, I wouldn’t promise something yummy then take it back without warning. You’re kind of asking for trouble…) 😉

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Sarah Brentyn Avatar

      Ooh, the Stickers and Stars post looks interesting. I missed that one. Off to read.

      Liked by 2 people

      1. Norah Avatar

        Thanks, Sarah. 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

    2. Norah Avatar

      That was the point of the story, Sarah. I’m pleased you saw it. I was beginning to think I hadn’t made it clear that the mother had reneged on a promise – not a good thing to do. Promises as a way of coercion are not good for a start, and breaking one – well that’s just setting oneself up for disaster – now and in the future.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Sarah Brentyn Avatar

        Agreed. I see breaking a promise as a breach of trust. It’s similar to lying (even if you didn’t mean to break the promise–say, you forgot or you truly weren’t able to keep it) in the sense that a child might get that abstract, uneasy feeling of uncertainty.

        Liked by 1 person

        1. Norah Avatar

          That’s it exactly, Sarah. It is a breach of trust which can be difficult to regain.

          Liked by 1 person

  5. Jim Borden Avatar

    sometimes you just want the real thing, grease and all…

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Particularly when it’s been promised. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Jim Borden Avatar

        exactly – and they won’t let you forget that promise… 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

        1. Norah Avatar

          And rightly so.

          Liked by 2 people

  6. Anne Goodwin Avatar

    .Clever flash, Norah. But I think it’s so hard for parents in our uber capitalist culture. Kids want what’s advertised, not what’s good for them.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Anne. I agree. It is very difficult for parents. But some make it more difficult for themselves by making promises they don’t keep and then making threats which, sadly, they probably will keep. There are better ways.

      Liked by 2 people

  7. Substituting « Carrot Ranch Literary Community Avatar

    […] Special Substitution by Norah Colvin […]

    Like

  8. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    I do get your point but that child… Hmm… Not on my watch!

    I thought you were going to do substitute teacher!

    Liked by 3 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      I was a substitute teacher for a while. I much preferred having my own class.
      With your proper parenting, the child would never behave that way – you wouldn’t make a promise and then break it, I’m sure.

      Liked by 2 people

  9. calmkate Avatar

    Absolutely love it!
    Tough love is vital, boundaries need to be set so kids learn discipline 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m pleased you enjoyed it, Kate. Thank you.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. calmkate Avatar

        always a pleasure Norah!

        Liked by 2 people

  10. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar

    Loved your tale Norah! I think I have seen this a time or two in real life. It is too bad when parents create battles around food with their kids. When it’s done right kids grow up preferring good foods and do not crave the forbidden fruits. This is a great follow up in many ways to your thinking on “Punished By Rewards” and now reminds me that one of the online modules for my recent Pre-K training had all to do with nutrition and how healthy eating can be encouraged. This mother in your flash means well and just blew it.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      I think she just needs to read a little of Alfie Kohn. 🙂
      None of us are perfect and most (all) of us set out with good intentions and do our best with what we know. I think it’s important to remember that when we may be quick to judge the behaviour of others.

      Like

  11. srbottch Avatar

    On the one hand, when you take a kid to the fast food place, make it fun and let them splurge on the high cholesterol stuff, save the healthy bits for home. On the other hand, can’t wait to see what the ‘reward’ is at home. Ouch! Enjoyed your story.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks for reading, Steve. I agree. I don’t think there’s much point in going to a fast food place and choosing unappetising ‘healthy’ choices, particularly after promising the treat of an unhealthy special burger. I think it might have been an ouch at home. It was pretty much an ouch in the restaurant too. I think this parent could learn a thing or two from you. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      1. srbottch Avatar

        …and how to write an effective short story, from you😉. Thanks, Norah.

        Liked by 3 people

        1. Norah Avatar

          Thank you, Steve. 🙂

          Liked by 2 people

  12. Prior... Avatar

    i am sad about fake meat and all the substitutes that are touted as better when industrial oils and sugar are the real culprits pulling from health
    and in your piece
    i like the way you led us from carrots to grain bun to the frisbee fake meat!
    hahahaha
    well
    done

    Liked by 1 person

  13. petespringerauthor Avatar
    petespringerauthor

    I like where you went with this one, Norah. Thank you for the thought -provoking piece on rewards, too.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m pleased you enjoyed it, Pete. Thanks for reading and commenting.

      Liked by 2 people

  14. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

    Exactly, Norah. There’s no substitute for parenting. Great story!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Miriam. I thought you’d agree. 🙂

      Like

  15. dgkaye Avatar

    No substitute, correct. Well done Norah 🙂

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby. I thought you’d agree. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      1. dgkaye Avatar

        Of course! 🙂 x

        Liked by 2 people

I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.