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Out of Time #flashfiction

Out of time flashfiction spooky campfire

This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a spooky tale told around a campfire. It doesn’t have to include the campfire; it can be the tale. Go where the prompt leads!

I’m not overly familiar with campfires, and spooky tales are not a favourite genre. I remember a few stories about apparitions from my childhood and they gave me nightmares for a long time. I am pleased to be unlike Cole Sear in the Sixth Sense in that I am unable to see dead people. A few times when I thought I might, it totally freaked me out.

Additionally, there aren’t many spooky picture books, so as a teacher of young children I was not exposed to a great many spooky stories. There are the Funnybones stories by Allan and Janet Ahlberg which are delightfully humorous and not at all scary and, of course, Casper is a friendly ghost.

Needless to say, I hadn’t ever tried to write a spooky story, so Charli’s prompt raised the possibility as a now or never event. Here’s my attempt. I hope it works, even just a little bit.

Out of Time

Darkness fell as Martin hastened home. He hated passing the cemetery, especially at Halloween. Sometimes he crossed the road, but this night he was out of time. Hairs on his arms prickled and shudders crept up his spine as he passed the open gate. A light flickered inside. He tried to not look, to not be drawn by the group gathered around a campfire, beckoning, ‘Join us.’ Martin hunched further into his jacket. ‘Next year then?’ Their ghoulish laughter chased him down the street into the path of a speeding car.

‘Back so soon. Couldn’t wait? Mwahaha!’ they chorused.

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49 responses to “Out of Time #flashfiction”

  1. Jennie Avatar

    Now that was really creepy! Well done, Norah.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Jennie. 🙂 👻

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome, Norah.

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  2. Hugh W. Roberts Avatar

    Your piece of flash fiction even gave me the spooks, Norah. I didn’t expect the speeding car at the end of Martin’s journey. Well done on rising to the challenge.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Hugh. I especially appreciate it coming from you, being a master of spooky.

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  4. Chel Owens Avatar

    Well, for one who does not like the genre, you did very well! I also am not a horror fan.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Chelsea. It was fun having a go.

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  5. Charli Mills Avatar

    Now or never moment? Oh, Norah, you are late to the genre but have arrived with the gift! I see spooky people in your story!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Charli. Seeing spooky – now I’m not sure whether that’s better than seeing dead people or not! 🙄

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  6. Jim Borden Avatar

    you’ve got a knack for the spooky stuff; quite the surprise ending!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Jim. I’m getting some lovely comments on my first attempt at spooky.

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      1. Jim Borden Avatar

        and rightly so!

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  7. Bette A. Stevens Avatar
    Bette A. Stevens

    Spooky… Well done!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Bette.

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  8. dgkaye Avatar

    Well done spooky twist Norah. Right in season. 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby.

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  9. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar

    Glad you chose now over never and wrote a spooky story for us. It put me in mind of the Emily Dickinson poem, “because I could not stop for Death he kindly stopped for me”…
    When I was very young we had Little Georgie books, I think that was the title. Little Georgie was a very good little ghost who lived with an elderly couple on their farm. They looked out for each other. Sweet books and probably put youngsters at ease regarding ghosts.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, D. It was fun writing it. I hope I didn’t go too far. Martin probably thinks I did.
      I don’t know the Little Georgie books. I think there are as many different experiences of ‘ghosts’ and other supernatural ‘events’ as there are people in the world. I’d rather be at ease with the possibilities.

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  10. calmkate Avatar

    such a gruesome end Norah … so unlike your usual writing but also enjoyable!

    think you nailed it 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Kate. It is a bit out of character for me, isn’t it?

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      1. calmkate Avatar

        hence it was more unexpected, you flexed your writers muscle, well done!

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Thank you, Kate. Appreciated.

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  11. Darlene Avatar

    Well done. Just spooky enough. A good twist at the end.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Darlene.

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  12. roughwighting Avatar

    Haha! You got me Norah. I thought this would be a soft shoe spooky story but it’s got a lot of scary content in there! I have to give you five stars on this. Boo!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Pam. I’m pleased I was successful. 👻

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  13. Kate Avatar

    Spooky makes chills run up and down my spine and your story did that. Lovely twist at the end. I’m glad I read it in the morning and not before going to bed. 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Kate. I’ll take that as meaning my story was successful. 👻

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      1. Kate Avatar

        Absolutely! I enjoyed it.

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  14. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    Oh my goodness! That I didn’t expect.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I hope that’s good. 🙂

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  15. Mabel Kwong Avatar

    This is very cleverly written, Norah. As you said, Martin didn’t see it coming, and we didn’t see it coming either. Lovely play on words, scene and storyline. Sometimes things do go bump in the night.

    It’s interesting how you mentioned there aren’t many spooky children’s books out there. I guess maybe no author wants to scare children with ghosts and ghouls. Then again some authors do make this genre children-friendly. That part of your post made me think how Disney created many spooky villains over the last few decades and are popular with children and adults alike.

    Hope you are doing well, Norah 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much for your lovely comment, Mabel. The ‘bump in the night’ was very clever.
      I’ll have to look into those spooky Disney villians. 🙂
      I hope you are enjoying your new-found freedom, Mabel. Stay safe.

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      1. Mabel Kwong Avatar

        Most Disney villains are colourful in colour and colourful in character. Looking forward to seeing more of your writing 🙂 It is great to have restrictions ease here, and we can finally go out now after so long.

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        1. Norah Avatar

          And today there were no cases of community transmission nation-wide. That’s really something to celebrate. Enjoy your return to freedom. 🙂

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  16. Markus + Micah Avatar

    I think you did well, this one is definitely spooky. It is subtle, that is why it is creepier. Well done!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you. I’m delighted to have succeeded.

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  17. petespringerauthor Avatar
    petespringerauthor

    Back so soon—I didn’t see that coming—nice work on the prompt, Norah.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Pete. Martin didn’t see it coming either. 😂

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  18. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

    Oh no, Norah. It scares me. Very well written!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Sorry to scare you, Miriam. But thank you.

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      1. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

        Haha, Norah, just Halloween!

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  19. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    Oh my, Norah, good job. This is really creepy.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Robbie. I’ll take that as a compliment from one of the masters of supernatural stories. 🙂

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      1. robbiesinspiration Avatar

        You are very kind, Norah.

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