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Tiny Flying Insects #flashfiction

This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story that includes tiny flying insects. Think about how the insects shape the scene or add to the action. Go where the prompt leads!

Like many, I have a love-hate relationship with tiny flying insects. I love some. I hate some. Well, perhaps hate is too strong a word. I dislike their presence but appreciate their contribution to the environment, whether it be as decomposers or valuable food source.

My love list includes:

  • butterflies
  • bees
  • ladybirds
  • dragonflies

My not-so-much list includes:

  • cockroaches
  • flies
  • mosquitos
  • midges

These two groups probably lie at either end of the continuum with thousands more in between.

My fascination with these tiny creatures can be easily evidenced on readilearn, my collection of teaching resources for the first three years of school, where there are numerous resources devoted to minibeasts, especially bees, butterflies, and ladybirds.

Keeping caterpillars in the classroom and watching them progress through their life stages until metamorphosing into adult butterflies was one of the children’s and my favourite things. It is a wonderful way to enable children to see nature close up and develop an appreciation for these tiny creatures and their contribution to the environment. It encourages them to look more closely and with more wonder when exploring the outdoors.

It would be easy to write a story about one of the tiny flying insects that I love and more of a challenge to write about one that I love not-quite-so-much. However, I have previously written a story about a fly for an (imaginary) audience of young children. I share a 99-word synopsis of that story in response to Charli’s challenge. Let’s see what you think of it.

BBQ the Fly

Named for their favourite thing, BBQ’s parents farewelled their son on his first independent foray.

“You can! Avoid the can!” they called. BBQ had trained relentlessly, perfecting every manoeuvre — walking on ceilings, buzzing people and, especially, dodging the dreaded spray.

BBQ’s antennae zeroed in on a backyard barbecue where he chose a juicy sausage for his ritual dance. He had just extended his proboscis when a swarm muscled in. Through the crowd, one of his compound eyes caught the glint of something metallic —a can!

He retracted his proboscis and escaped just as the spray downed the unfortunate swarm.

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52 responses to “Tiny Flying Insects #flashfiction”

  1. Mabel Kwong Avatar

    I am with you on your love list and dislike list of insects. Agree insects we dislike have a part to play in our environment and contribute to sustaining it. Absolutely love your short story. Really enjoyed reading it. It is so cleverly written. I felt the use of BBQ as the name of the fly was every original and made it seem more like a friend at a BBQ than a pest to swat. And he seemed to like BBQ sausages too. Good there was a happy ending and he escaped. Great writing, Norah 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much for you support, Mabel. I appreciate the way you analysed my story. It’s good to see which parts worked. I’m pleased you like BBQ’s name. 🙂

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      1. Mabel Kwong Avatar

        Hope to hear about BBQ again someday. He sounds like quite a character 🙂

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Thanks, Mabel. I did write it first as a picture book manuscript. I’m not sure that it has a positive future.

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          1. Mabel Kwong Avatar

            Who knows, Norah. Maybe the your story on BBQ will see the light of day some day 🙂

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            1. Norah Avatar

              Maybe …

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  2. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This is a great story, Norah, although I hate flies which are a huge pest here with our heat.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      They are here too. I find them very annoying as they always seem to buzz me.

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  3. Jennie Avatar

    Way to go, BBQ!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Jennie. 🙂

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome, Norah.

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  4. dgkaye Avatar

    What a fun and clever story Norah. And he lived to pester another day, lol. I had to laugh at the name BBQ LOL 🙂 xx

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby. I’m pleased you enjoyed it. Humans name their children after their favourite things, so I thought – why not a fly? 😂

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      1. dgkaye Avatar

        Brilliant! 🙂

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  5. Anne Goodwin is bringing Matilda Windsor home Avatar

    This was definitely one for you, Norah. So he survived to bite another day 😉

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Yeah – just wasn’t quick enough with the can! 😂😂
      I couldn’t wait for Matilda to arrive in the post – have downloaded the Kindle version and can’t wait to start reading tonight. 🙂

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  6. Liz H Avatar

    This bugged me in just the right way! 😉

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    1. Norah Avatar

      😂😉😊 Thank you.

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  7. calmkate Avatar

    lucky lewy lived to loiter at another bbq … you got right into the fly psyche with this one Norah!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Kate. I’m not sure what that says about me. 😂

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      1. calmkate Avatar

        that you have a true affinity, even with those not on your fav list 🙂

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Aw, that’s nice. Thank you.

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          1. calmkate Avatar

            my pleasure respected teacher!

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  8. Jules Avatar

    I’ve got one of those children’s toys – a bug eye view. Good thing BBQ had a scan of the can!
    Fun story 😀

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Jules. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.

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  9. petespringerauthor Avatar
    petespringerauthor

    I enjoyed this a lot. It’s fun to think of an insect character named BBQ. Flies can certainly be quite annoying for the short time that they live.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      They can indeed, Pete. Their short life span is too long for me. 😂

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  10. Charli Mills Avatar

    Norah, your interest in insects is evident not only in your readilearn materials, but also in your empathy for BBQ Fly.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m not sure that I actually have any empathy for the fly. I find them rather annoying. I was just keen to write a story from another point of view. I do apologise to them though, if they encroach on my territory and I have to do away with them. I tell them they are free to be wherever they like, as long as it’s not near me! 🙂

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  11. Patricia Tilton Avatar

    Fun story! Love that he avoided the can. Like you, I love your first list of insects. I have a 3-year-old great nephew that is crazy about bugs. Am looking for some book for his birthday this month.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Patricia.There are so many wonderful bug books available. I’m sure you’ll have no trouble finding some for your great nephew. Choosing from all that are available will be the difficult bit. 🙂

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  12. Bette A. Stevens Avatar
    Bette A. Stevens

    Good one, Norah! 😎

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Bette. 🙂

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  13. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    Since I just returned from a land of mosquitos and bees, this is particularly fun. Love to view the human world through the compound eye of a fly!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Jacqui. I thought it would be fun to take a different point of view.

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  14. Hugh W. Roberts Avatar

    He was taught well, Norah. Murder on a sausage sounds like one of the most unlikely places to meet your maker. At least they had their final meal.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Good point, Hugh. At least there’s an at least to the story. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  15. OIKOS™-Editorial Avatar

    I am also with you in this, Norah! Love the posting! Have a beautiful week! Michael

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Michael. You have a wonderful week too. 🙂

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      1. OIKOS™-Editorial Avatar

        Thank you very much, Norah! xx

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  16. Jim Borden Avatar

    his parents taught him well!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      😂 They did!

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  17. Susan Scott Avatar

    Oik Norah, a Ronald Dahl type tale! (Btw I heard that even the Buddha did not like mosquitoes)

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Roald Dahl! I am chuffed. Thank you. And I’m in good company with my dislike of mosquitos. I don’t feel so back now. 🙂

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  18. beth Avatar

    I’m totally with you on this –

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Beth. 💖🦋🐞🐝

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  19. TanGental Avatar

    A happy fly story… I’m buzzing

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks, Geoff. I thought a story told from the fly’s point of view would be a little different.

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