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Winning Story — Seeking Peace #flashfiction

I recently entered the Sue Vincent Classic Rodeo at the Carrot Ranch and was both surprised and delighted for my entry to be awarded first prize. You can read about other place getters here and all entries here.

The competition asked for 99-words stories with a beginning, middle and end to be written in response to this photo of Sue’s.

Here is my winning entry. I hope you enjoy it.

Seeking Peace

They stopped on a verge overlooking the valley.

“It’s beautiful, Dad. And so big. You said it was small.”

“Not small in size, son. Small in mind.”

“What’s that mean?”

“Folks round here didn’t want your mum and me getting married. They threatened to keep us apart. Cruel words were spoken. We left and never returned.”

“Why’re we coming back?”

“Your mother asked us — to make peace. Before it’s too late.”

“Like it is for her?” His voice trembled.

“Yeah.” He rubbed the boy’s head.

“Will we?”

“We’ll know soon enough.”

He inched the car towards the village.

***

Here is what the judges said about it.

“This author nailed a response to a photo challenge with the opening line, taking the reader from photo to story with an economy of words. This is a smart strategy when you only have 99 words or 99 syllables. We step out of the image into the lives of a father and son. The dialog is clear, sharp, and tells the story of loss and hopeful redemption. The judges appreciated a place not small in size but small in mind. That single concept conveys much. A well-crafted story with emotion and purpose takes ownership of the photo.”

What do you think? Do you agree?

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Comments

43 responses to “Winning Story — Seeking Peace #flashfiction”

  1. Teresa Berkowitz Avatar

    Congratulations! It’s so moving.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you. 🙂

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  2. OIKOS™-Editorial Avatar

    Congratulations, Norah! Really well deserved! Sue always was able to surprise with her challenges. I was so shocked, reading about her passing away, just some minutes ago. Now, every photo challenge will remember me on her. Michael

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    1. Norah Avatar

      There is much that’s special about Sue that we will always remember and keep in our hearts. Thanks for your comments, Michael.

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  3. calmkate Avatar

    enjoyed my first reading and then my second, congrats Norah! Well deserved 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Kate. I’m doubly honoured.

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  4. Patricia Tilton Avatar

    Congratulations, Norah! I love the judges comments — and they are spot on. Your one sentence is very powerful!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Patricia. I really appreciate your encouragement.

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  5. Sarah Brentyn Avatar

    Lovely story, Norah. Congratulation, again, on your win! 🎉

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Sarah. 💖

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  6. robinettercleave Avatar

    Congratulations, Norah!!! – a fabulous read!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Robin. Appreciated. 🙂

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  7. Darlene Avatar

    Congratualtions! You definitely deserved to win. It is a superb story in so few words.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Darlene. I really appreciate your support.

      Liked by 1 person

    2. thegriefreality Avatar

      Yes, a HUGE congrats!!

      Liked by 1 person

  8. Bette A. Stevens Avatar
    Bette A. Stevens

    A great story! Wonderful, Norah.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Bette. 💖

      Liked by 1 person

  9. Jim Borden Avatar

    congrats for a job well done, Norah!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Jim.

      Liked by 1 person

  10. Kate Avatar

    Congratulations, Norah. A lovely story.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Kate. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  11. robertawrites235681907 Avatar

    A great story, Norah. I was delighted to see you as the winner.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Robbie. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  12. Anne Goodwin's next novel is out May 28 Avatar

    Of course I agree. Loved the story and delighted to find out it was yours.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Anne. I appreciate your encouragement and support.

      Liked by 1 person

  13. TanGental Avatar

    Super read. You’ve become a real talent at super short flash, norah.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Geoff. Maybe I was fortunate that you and some of the others writers were judging rather than entering. 😉

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  14. petespringerauthor Avatar
    petespringerauthor

    Congratulations again, Norah. We need those reminders from others that someone likes what we write.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Pete. We do. And this one couldn’t have come at a better time. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  15. Susan Scott Avatar

    how deep is that valley how deep are your words … lovely Norah. Congratulations!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Susan. 🙂

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  16. Chel Owens Avatar

    👏🏻👏🏻 I would have given you first as well! You fit a lot in a little space.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Chelsea. I would have chosen your poem. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Chel Owens Avatar

        I thought the poem would get honorable mention; the story, not at all.

        Liked by 1 person

        1. Norah Avatar

          Then you were pleasantly surprised like I was. 🙂

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  17. Becky Ross Michael Avatar

    Solid story, Norah!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Becky. 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  18. beth Avatar

    it is a well-deserved win. I think your words do great justice to sue’s photo.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Beth. I appreciate your kind words.

      Liked by 1 person

  19. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

    Congratulations, Norah! Very enjoyable read!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Miriam. 🙂

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  20. June Avatar

    Well done.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, June. 🙂

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