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The Strong One #flashfiction

Wife Carrying Contest - Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction

Wife Carrying Contest - Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction

This week at the Carrot Ranch, Charli Mills challenged writers to In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about a carried wife. Why is she being carried? Who is carrying? Pick a genre if you’d like and craft a memorable character. Go where the prompt leads!

In her post, Charli

  • explained differences in genres
  • introduced us to Sirrka, a remarkable 99-year-old American of Finnish parents
  • told us of the Finnish wife-carrying contest, which prompted the flash fiction prompt
  • assured us that we are ‘always evolving’.

Please pop over to the Ranch to read Charli’s post and other responses to the prompt.

I agree with Charli that we are always evolving.

When I started writing this blog six and a half years ago, my intention was to write about education. Whenever I responded to one of Charli’s prompts, I attempted to embed my story in a post that focused on education or child development. I was mostly successful.

However, not all prompts, such as this wife-carrying challenge, lend themselves easily to education, though I could certainly do it if I tried with a story about children in school learning about Finland and Finnish customs, for example.

Since I also write posts about education for my second blog at readilearn, which I republish here, I have decided to allow myself a little more flexibility with my responses to Charli’s prompts. From now on, with my word for this year being ‘prioritise’, I will focus more on writing a story than embedding it in a post.

This is my story for this week. I hope you like it.

The Strong One

“You’re strong,” she giggled as he piggy-backed her around the playground at lunchtime.

“You’re strong,” she murmured as he lifted her over the puddle outside their graduation dance.

When he carried her over the threshold on their wedding day, her eyes sparkled with words unsaid but understood.

When they heard of Finland’s wife carrying contest, she smirked. “We could do that. You’re strong.”

He indicated the sleeping children. “When they’re grown.”

When cancer ravaged her body, she soothed, “Stay strong.”

When he and their sons carried her from the chapel on her final journey, he’d never felt so weak.

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Thank you for reading. As always, I appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts.

Comments

62 responses to “The Strong One #flashfiction”

  1. Jules Avatar

    I did read this last week at the CR prompt page…
    Strength comes in many ways… I admire spouses and partners that carry each other with love and support while encouraging individuality.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I agree, Jules. I do too!

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  2. tidalscribe Avatar

    A carefully crafted change of mood – tiny tale that will stay with us.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you. I appreciate your comment.

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  3. Jennie Avatar

    Oh my! You captured a lifetime in 99 words, and you did it beautifully!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Jennie. 🙂

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome, Norah. 🙂

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  4. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

    This is very well written with insights and emotions, Norah! It’s so true that she was part of his strength when he carried her.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Miriam. Appreciated.

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  5. pedometergeek Avatar

    This flash was just excellent, Norah. Poignant and moving and so apropos of life. Thanks for sharing it with everyone. Loved it. ~nan

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much for your support, Nan. Appreciated.

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  6. Jim Borden Avatar

    the story is a roller coaster of emotions – in just 99 words… well done.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Jim.

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  7. Hugh's Views and News Avatar

    Wow! A life story in only 99-words. This piece of flash fiction was so well written and thought out, Norah. I’d say one of your best.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much, Hugh.

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  8. Anne Goodwin (Annecdotist) Avatar

    Your intro had me laughing as I thought of the contortions of the required to bring out the educational merits of the carried wife. Then your story brought tears to my eyes – it’s so well done, thanks for sharing. And congratulations on your resolution to prioritise. I hope you can keep it up.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much for your kind words, Anne. No contortions this week. 🙂

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  9. Ellen Best Avatar

    Hi Norah, its nice to dip my toe back in that cooling trough on the ranch. And re connect with friends I feel I have known for the longest time. X

    I thouroughly submerged myself in their journey. A great response to the prompt. I am glad you chose something that had both light and shade. My offering possibly darkens too quick. The Husband thought it morbid,which saddened me. I wanted him to see, purpose, the thing that warns its reader of the pain of life if you succum to the look at me world of today. Suprising how 99 words can evoke emotion elation and empathy. You captured it all.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Ellen. I’ve just popped over to read your story. It is also a very full 99 words. And full of grief too. It certainly does evoke emotion and empathy. So sad.

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  10. Lisa A. Listwa Avatar

    Read yours earlier over at the Ranch. Beautifully done, Norah.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Lisa. 🙂

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  11. Charli Mills Avatar

    I found your story hit the mark on grief. I recall a number of years back, a conversation over the ability to write grief with authenticity (it was initiated by a post of Anne Goodwin’s, I believe). You have achieved authenticity. I’m pleased to see that you are shifting priorities and adjusting to focus and yet allow for word play.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Charli. I’m pleased the feelings were authentic.
      Sadly, my priorities didn’t allow me to join in with the ‘protest’ prompt this week. I feel like protesting. 🙂

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  12. petespringerauthor Avatar
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    You hit a home run with this one, Norah! I’ve always got so many things going on, but I need to try more of these flash fiction prompts. I think I only did one in the past that intrigued me.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much, Pete. Sadly, I’m having to prioritise other things at the moment and may not get to join in again for a little while.

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  13. Jacqui Murray Avatar

    I know exactly what you mean about the two hats–ed and writing. I briefly struggled with that and gave up! But, I did notice over a period of years that a lot of writers are teachers (I’m sure you’ve seen that two) so I like you am going to try a blend of my two hats, roughly following your good example.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I look forward to seeing what you do with both hats. 🙂

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  14. Chelsea Owens Avatar

    Oh, Norah. ❤ 😥

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  15. Annika Perry Avatar

    Norah, an inspired response to the prompt that captures a whole lifetime in such intense short piece. The last line is heartbreaking but sadly an emotion felt by so many.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you for your lovely comment, Annika. Sadly, it is a situation many find themselves in. Heartbreaking.

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  16. Renaissance Renee Avatar

    Powerful, Norah. A real punch in the tail, as per all good flash fiction. Almost made me cry.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Renee. I appreciate your encouraging comment about my story, but am sorry to hear it almost made you cry.

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  17. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This post gave me goosebumps, Norah. My mom is ill and in a great deal of pain. Somehow, this post has ignited my anxiety about a return of cancer.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I’m sorry to hear about your Mum, Robbie, and that reading this post caused you distress. I hope your mum’s pain is temporary and that the cause is not as serious as you think.

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      1. robbiesinspiration Avatar

        Hi Norah, it is funny that I thought of cancer when I read this post and then I spoke to my mom and discovered that she was really worried about bone cancer. It turned out to be a good thing because we could discuss it. The doctor thinks it is arthritis in her back and she is being treated accordingly. Only if this treatment doesn’t work will they look further.

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        1. Miriam Hurdle Avatar

          Sorry to hear your mum has problem with her back, Robbie. I hope the doctor follows up on the treatment and makes sure it’s not cancer. When people aged, arthritis seems to be a common problem. Knowing it’s not cancer would ease her mind.

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        2. Norah Avatar

          I’m pleased the story stimulated the conversation with your mum, Robbie. I hope the doctors are right and that she gets appropriate care and pain relief.

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  18. nightlake Avatar

    The emotional strength she had given him is gone forever. so nicely done.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you so much. I’m pleased you saw that in the story. I originally titled it ‘The Strong Man’ but changed it to show the ambiguity of where the strength was sourced.

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  19. thecontentedcrafter Avatar

    Wow! That’s quite a story to come back to Norah. Your ability to weave the subject to fit your theme of children and learning has always amazed me – and even when you step away from that – still you do it! We learn here how fleeting life is and how we carry and are carried in different ways. I think this brilliant!

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Happy new year, Pauline! It’s so nice to see you. And I love, love, love your comment. Thank you. I like the way you read my stuff. 🙂

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  20. calmkate Avatar

    wow super well told, a powerful story … go with the flow as Charli says 🙂

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much, Kate. Love, and appreciate, your comment. 🙂

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      1. calmkate Avatar

        my pleasure Norah 🙂

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  21. Prior... Avatar

    whew — that ending was dense and heavy! but also well done and fit in with the fiction – you led us up to a halfway point and then it seemed to bullet to the end – well done, Norah.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      I guess I did bullet to the end, Yvette. Life’s sometimes like that. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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      1. Prior... Avatar

        It was excellent with that kind of ending – you built up to it and it flowed perfectly –
        And once again you have us a piece that felt more Than 99 words with your own signature style – so keep doing what you do – so good

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Thank you for your support, Yvette – very much appreciated.

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      2. Prior... Avatar

        And side note – you inspired me to maybe write a fiction piece for this week – trying to see if I have time

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        1. Norah Avatar

          Ooh, I hope you do. 🙂

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          1. Prior... Avatar

            Hi – started writing about a husband carrying his wife during a family crisis – but ran out of time – this is a busy month for me (but also fun month so that is cool) but limited with blog time

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            1. Norah Avatar

              I know the feeling! We do what we can.

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  22. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar

    Ah, Buddy, you still got the kids in there- the couple as kids, then their kids. This is so well done, the balance of third person narration and dialogue with subtle repetition poetic and poignant.
    Good for you to take some pressure off by prioritizing and focusing on one thing. Your ability to embed and entwine has always amazed me but yeah, not all prompts lend themselves to double dipping, not easily anyway. (Though you made it look easy)

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank, D. I appreciate your reading and the time you took to comment on specific aspects of my story. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.
      Thank you for understanding my need to prioritise. I’m still hoping to join in with a story most weeks. 🙂

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  23. Bette A. Stevens Avatar

    Poignant and powerful, Norah… ❤

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much, Bette. 💖

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  24. dgkaye Avatar

    Wow! Well done in 99 words Norah. That was beautiful, yet, so sad. ❤

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thank you, Debby. I appreciate your comment. 🙂

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  25. Robert Kirkendall Avatar

    You covered a lifetime and all its emotional complexity in just 99 words. Well done.

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    1. Norah Avatar

      Thanks so much for reading and commenting, Robert. You are appreciated.

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      1. Robert Kirkendall Avatar

        You’re welcome, Norah.

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